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 //**__ To Earn Utopia __**// Written By: //Ashley Camacho //



It wasn't always like this, we never thought that this would ever happen here. Oh, I forgot to introduce myself. I am Bob the minion, dishwasher, entertainer, and let’s not forget, Gru's favorite of them all. I remember when my great master Gru's youngest daughter, Agnes, passed with an unknown disease and the doctors now know what it was. It wasn't Cancer but Echo-virus: it imitates other diseases and is deadly to children like Agnes. After that fateful night, our Utopian home was in bits. Our master corrupted and became more and more demanding but vulnerable for his little angel, Agnes, whom he gave every little bit of his love. His eldest Margaret was barely seen outside except for when she traveled to school. His now youngest Edith was even more chaotic then before Agnes passed. All of us minions made a special Agnes shrine in our lounge to remember her for life. I will tell you how that night went... Agnes was grabbing her rib cage and jerking from side to side while screaming her lungs out in that white hospital bed next to her favorite unicorn, the one that Gru got her at the fair, the dog Jojo, and many more "get well" balloons surrounded her. Doctors were running all over the place trying to save her young life and bumping into their fellow co-workers. Gru screamed," Help her, anyone please just save her and do your job!" Her two older sisters, Margaret and Edith, were right by her crying until they couldn't anymore. I was in charge of calling the others and filling them in. Poor little Agnes had stopped grabbing on her rib cage and now at her foot while doctors pulled her out to test her for meningitis but it was too late, Agnes was in cardiac arrest and didn't show any signs of coming back. Her family and I were crying for her and I was still on the phone with the others and heard them crying too, knowing the only thing that would make us cry was if they couldn't save her. Two years later and here we are, sitting here and being devastated about something that Agnes herself wouldn't have wanted us to mourn for so long. One day my fellow minions and I were plotting to build a time machine so we can save Agnes and everything would be paradise once more. Little did we know, Margaret had left her room and was eavesdropping on us while we made the plans and watching us from the vents. Margaret waited for all of us to leave the room and slipped out and went to her father's study. She slammed the door open and shouted, "Dad, the minions want to save Agnes!" He replied with an excited expression on his face and told her to tell her sister that they were going to save Agnes. Luckily I had just walked in when she had spilled the beans and said," Dr. Gru, we'll need many materials like a clock, a car, steering wheels, dials, switches, and many more. It won't be easy." His immediate reaction was that he lifted me up so we were eye to eye and said," I don't need easy, I need possible." Margaret, Edith, and I stared at him quizzically to determine if he was joking or not and he wasn’t, he looked as serious as a person could. All the other minions had heard that even our faithful employer wanted to do this, so we began our work. Gru bought a car and many steering wheels, Edith gave up all her switches and dials, Margaret gave up her favorite clock, and I gave up the plans, my comfy chairs, and five entire days to construct the beautiful masterpiece. After all was completed Edith asked, “What if it doesn’t work? What would we do then? What if Agnes is meant to die at her age dad?” We all turned to Dr. Gru as he replied,“Let’s not think about that okay? I want to be positive about this.” So we set off and of course Edith just had to literally jump off the walls while making the dials go to a year before Gru adopted the girls. When we stepped out of the car we fell on the ground and everyone around us laughed hysterically. We asked them what year it was and one of them said that it was 2007. We all glared at Edith knowing that it was the same year that Gru adopted the girls and a year before Agnes passed. Edith cowered down, looking ashamed in herself. We all staggered up and looked around and we saw Gru pop the kid’s balloon making him cry and we all ran behind the car to watch as Gru went inside the bank. We all jumped up and hit each others' heads and filed into the machine I put on the right time when everyone, including Edith, was in a seat buckled and there we went. We stepped out of the car once more and fell again. We were in the hospital parking lot at 5:30 p.m. One hour before Agnes passed. We rushed into the hospital and saw Agnes coughing and jerking and told the doctors about Echo-virus and they immediately tested her for it and she got a positive reading. Luckily they had the antidote on hand and gave it to her. She lived and they went back to the present. There they stepped out and they were in complete awe. Everything was paradise, Agnes lived and that day she did die was her 5th birthday. Margaret, Edith, and Agnes ran up and hugged Gru but then Agnes started jerking again.

//To Earn Utopia // It wasn't always like this, we never thought that this would ever happen here. Oh, I forgot to introduce myself. I am Bob the minion, dishwasher, entertainer, and let’s not forget, Gru's favorite of them all. I remember when my great master Gru's youngest daughter, Agnes, passed with an unknown disease and the doctors now know what it was. It wasn't Cancer but Echo-virus; it imitates other diseases and is deadly to children like Agnes. After that fateful night, our Utopian home was in bits. Our master corrupted and became more and more demanding but vulnerable for his little angel, Agnes, whom he gave every little bit of his love. His eldest Margaret was barely seen outside except for when she traveled to school. His now youngest Edith was even more chaotic then before Agnes passed. All of us minions made a special Agnes shrine in our lounge to remember her for life. It looks like you are missing some commas...and maybe some periods. The one only five part is a bit confusing. I conquer...

I will tell you how that night went... Agnes was grabbing her rib cage and jerking from side to side while screaming her lungs out in that white hospital bed next to her favorite unicorn, the one that Gru got her at the fair, the dog Jojo, and many more "get well" balloons surrounded her. Doctors were running all over the place trying to save her young life and bumping into their fellow co-workers. Gru screamed," Help her, anyone please just save her and do your job!" Her two older sisters, Margaret and Edith, were right by her crying until they couldn't anymore. I was in charge of calling the others and filling them in. Poor little Agnes had stopped grabbing on her rib cage and now at her foot while doctors pulled her out to test her for meningitis but it was too late, Agnes was in cardiac arrest and didn't show any signs of coming back. Her family and I were crying for her and I was still on the phone with the others and heard them crying too, knowing the only thing that would make us cry was if they couldn't save her.

Two years later and here we are, sitting here and being devastated about something that Agnes herself wouldn't have wanted us to mourn for so long.

One day my fellow minions and I were plotting to build a time machine so we can save Agnes and everything would be paradise once more. Little did we know, Margaret had left her room and was eavesdropping on us while we made the plans and watching us from the vents. Margaret waited for all of us to leave the room and slipped out and went to her father's study. She slammed the door open and shouted, "Dad, the minions want to save Agnes!" He replied with an excited expression on his face and told her to tell her sister that they were going to save Agnes. Luckily I had just walked in when she had spilled the beans and said," Dr. Gru, we'll need many materials like a clock, a car, steering wheels, dials, switches, and many more. It won't be easy." His immediate reaction was that he lifted me up so we were eye to eye and said," I don't need easy, I need possible." Margaret, Edith, and I stared at him quizzically to determine if he was joking or not and he wasn’t, he looked as serious as a person could. All the other minions had heard that even our faithful employer wanted to do this, so we began our work. Gru bought a car and many steering wheels, Edith gave up all her switches and dials, Margaret gave up her favorite clock, and I gave up the plans, my comfy chairs, and five entire days to construct the beautiful masterpiece. After all was completed Edith asked, “What if it doesn’t work? What would we do then? What if Agnes is meant to die at her age dad?” We all turned to Dr. Gru as he replied,“Let’s not think about that okay? I want to be positive about this.” So we set off and of course Edith just had to literally jump off the walls while making the dials go to a year before Gru adopted the girls. When we stepped out of the car we fell on the ground and everyone around us laughed hysterically. We asked them what year it was and one of them said that it was 2007. We all glared at Edith knowing that it was the same year that Gru adopted the girls and a year before Agnes passed. Edith cowered down, looking ashamed in herself. We all staggered up and looked around and we saw Gru pop the kid’s balloon making him cry and we all ran behind the car to watch as Gru went inside the bank. We all jumped up and hit each others' heads and filed into the machine I put on the right time when everyone, including Edith, was in a seat buckled and there we went. We stepped out of the car once more and fell again. We were in the hospital parking lot at 5:30 p.m. One hour before Agnes passed. We rushed into the hospital and saw Agnes coughing and jerking and told the doctors about Echo-virus and they immediately tested her for it and she got a positive reading. Luckily they had the antidote on hand and gave it to her. She lived and they went back to the present. There they stepped out and they were in complete awe. Everything was paradise, Agnes lived and that day she did die was her 5th birthday. Margaret, Edith, and Agnes ran up and hugged Gru but then Agnes started jerking again. Good story. I'm not sure if it's right but you might want to indent when Gru replies to Edith. Great job! I Liked it.