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=__Navigation Bar__= 1Maddie G.'s Homepage 1Maddie G.'s Blog 1Maddie G.'s Animal Farm Page 1Maddie G.'s Tale of Utopia 1Maddie G.'s Webquest Page Commercial The book is a must read! It has 13 amazing stories including The missing Crown, Zombie Utopia, The Savanna Turns Black, and many more. You can purchase on iTunes or in stores. THe New York Times gave a 9.5 out of ten. It's also an iTunes top seller! You need to get this book! __My mini saga 1__ The princess awoke that morning and thought it would be like any other day. She got dressed and went to get her crown but as she reached for it there was nothing there. She went to go tell her father, but then realized that she knew who had taken it.

__ My mini saga 2 __ Kimberly claimed she hadn’t stolen the crown, but the guards didn’t listen. Kim had been an outcast all her life and nobody liked her. The only people that believed she hadn’t stolen it were her parents. The guards grabbed Kim and left her house to go back to the castle.

__ The Missing Crown __ by Maddie Good





Princess Jane awoke that morning and thought it would be like any other day. She got dressed and went to get her crown, but as she reached for it, there was nothing there. She went to go tell her father, but then realized that she knew who had taken it.

The Village had been having many problems lately. They had had a bad year for growing their crops so there was not much food. They had been attacked by other villages twice and had lost both battles. Princess Jane knew that when her Mother and Father found out they would be furious. She also knew that the townspeople were the ones who had to pay for the crown, so once they found out they would be angry toward her and her family. Princess Jane went up to her Father and told him that her crown wasn’t where she had put it the night before so it must have been stolen by someone. She went on to tell him that she had a good idea of who had taken it, though. Her name was Kimberly; she was a girl about Jane’s age, but Jane had never cared much for her.

As soon as the King heard this, he got the guards and ordered them to go and get Kimberly from her house. When they got there, they burst in the door and told Kimberly’s mom to get her for them. She came in the room and the guards asked her if she had taken the crown. Kimberly claimed she had not stolen the crown, but the guards did not listen. Kimberly had been an outcast all her life and nobody liked her. The only people that believed she had not stolen it were her parents. The guards grabbed Kim and left her house to go back to the castle.

When she got to the castle, the King stated asking her the questions right away. The whole time while this was happening Princess Jane was just sitting in the corner glaring at Kim. Kim stuck to her story that she had not taken the crown. She said that she could not have because she had been with her family the whole night. They did not believe her, the king argued that this was not an excuse and that her family would lie to save her from getting in trouble. One of the guards mentioned that the King could not make the decision for Kim to go to jail for the crown being misplaced, and that he would have to take her to a court where the town’s people would decide whether she was guilty or innocent, so the king proceeded to do this. The Queen got the guards to get the towns people and go to the courtrooms. The king ordered all the workers in the castle to go to the courtroom, except for one house cleaner who was ordered to stay back and clean the bathrooms.

When all the people were at the courthouse, they began the trial. The townspeople had no idea what was going on. Once they were told what had happened they were livid. The crown had been very expensive and the people were the ones who had paid for it. They said that they had already had a tough year and most of their problems had been the royal families fault. At this, the Royal Family started to get very worried. Princess Jane stood up and told the people about how it was not her fault that the crown was gone because Kim had stolen it. Jane said that she had seen Kim walking toward the castle that night and, that Kim had always been jealous that Princess Jane had more money than her. She even went on to say that, she thought it was Kim’s fault they had lost the battles they had fought with other villages. “Kim has other relatives in the villages and she told them what our plans of attack were, and this is why we lost.” said Jane. The people believed it. At once, they all started shouting to have Kim thrown in jail. Kim started crying and yelling that she had not taken the crown.

Then something peculiar happened. The maid who had been ordered to stay at the castle walked in with a bag and yelled for attention. The room fell silent and all eyes were on her. She said that she was ordered by the king to stay back at the castle and clean while the trial was going on, but instead of cleaning, she had decided to look around Princess Jane’s room. An apprehensive look came upon Jane’s face. The maid said that while she was in there she had found the crown that was supposedly stolen underneath the princess’s bed; she then pulled the crown out of her bag. The King and Queen's mouths’ fell open and the princess looked as if she was about to have a heart attack. Kim on the other hand was overjoyed that the maid had proven her innocent. One of the citizens stated, " Whenever anything went wrong it became usual to attribute it to Kimberly", The village agreed that they needed a new leader because obviously the royal family was not doing a good job, so it was decided that Princess Jane, her father and her mother would need to leave the castle immediately and have someone else rule over the village. The End

Princess Jane awoke that morning and thought it would be like any other day. She got dressed and went to get her crown, but as she reached for it, there was nothing there. She went to go tell her father, but then realized that she knew who had taken it. Good job just decide where to make paragraphs Great Start! The Village had been having many problems lately. They had had a bad year for growing their crops so there was not much food. They had been attacked by other villages twice and had lost both battles. Princess Jane knew that when her Mother and Father found out they would be furious. She also knew that the townspeople were the ones who had to pay for the crown, so once they found out they would be angry toward her and her family. Princess Jane went up to her Father and told him that her crown wasn’t where she had put it the night before so it must have been stolen by someone. She went on to tell him that she had a good idea of who had taken it, though. Her name was Kimberly; she was a girl about Jane’s age, but Jane had never cared much for her. try not to use the word though twice. You Can take out "who were the king and queen," because it is implied.
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As soon as the King heard this, he got the guards and ordered them to go and get Kimberly from her house. When they got there, they burst in the door and told Kimberly’s mom to get her for them. She came in the room and the guards asked her if she had taken the crown. Kimberly claimed she had not stolen the crown, but the guards did not listen. Kimberly had been an outcast all her life and nobody liked her. The only people that believed she had not stolen it were her parents. The guards grabbed Kim and left her house to go back to the castle. Is it Kim or Kimberly? When she got to the castle, the King stated asking her the question right away. The whole time while this was happening Princess Jane was just sitting in the corner glaring at Kim. Kim stuck to her story that she had not taken the crown. She said that she could not have because she had been with her family the whole night. They did not believe her, the king argued that this was not an excuse and that her family would lie to save her from getting in trouble. One of the guards mentioned that the King could not make the decision for Kim to go to jail for the crown being misplaced, and that he would have to take her to a court where the town’s people would decide whether she was guilty or innocent, so the king proceeded to do this. The Queen got the guards to get the towns people and go to the courtrooms. The king ordered all the workers in the castle to go to the courtroom, except for one house cleaner who was ordered to stay back and clean the bathrooms. When all the people were at the courthouse, they began the trial. The townspeople had no idea what was going on. Once they were told what had happened they were livid. The crown had been very expensive and the people were the ones who had paid for it. They said that they had already had a tough year and most of their problems had been the royal families fault. At this, the Royal Family started to get very worried. Princess Jane stood up and told the people about how it was not her fault that the crown was gone because Kim had stolen it. Jane said that she had seen Kim walking toward the castle that night and, that Kim had always been jealous that Princess Jane had more money than her. She even went on to say that, she thought it was Kim’s fault they had lost the battles they had fought with other villages. “Kim has other relatives in the villages and she told them what our plans of attack were, and this is why we lost.” said Jane. The people believed it. At once, they all started shouting to have Kim thrown in jail. Kim started crying and yelling that she had not taken the crown. Then something peculiar happened. The maid who had been ordered to stay at the castle walked in with a bag and yelled for attention. The room fell silent and all eyes were on her. She said that she was ordered by the king to stay back at the castle and clean while the trial was going on, but instead of cleaning, she had decided to look around Princess Jane’s room. An apprehensive look came upon Jane’s face. The maid said that while she was in there she had found the the crown that was supposedly stolen underneath the princess’s bed, she then pulled the crown out of her bag. The King and Queen's mouths’ fell open and the princess looked as if she was about to have a heart attack. Kim on the other hand was overjoyed that the maid had proven her innocent. One of the citizens stated, " Whenever anything went wrong it became usual to attribute it to Kimberly", The village agreed that they needed a new leader because obviously the royal family was not doing a good job, so it was decided that Princess Jane, her father and her mother would need to leave the castle immediately and have someone else rule over the village. Nice Way of ending the story. You really left the readers hanging.... You need a Quote from animal farm in there somewhere, I didn't see one. Nice writing I found very few mistakes. The paragraphs were the only major things that needed fixing.

__ Dean Groom activity __ The two whales had just finished eating when a brood of flying squirrels, which had lost their wings, filed into the chicken coop, chuckling feebly and wandering from side to side to find some place where they would not be eaten. A man with a mustache made a sort of wall round them with his feet, and the squirrels nestled down inside it and promptly fell asleep. At the last moment Johny, the witty, ugly brown donkey who loved to eat turnips, came mincing clumsily in, chewing at a bag of barbecue chips.

MIDDLE _ BEGINNING _ END Work Sheet

Princess Jane, her father (King Frank), her mother (Queen Susan), Kimberly (towns person) Princess Jane's crown has been stolen and they need to find the person who took it and get it back. They stay in the same setting. || At first Princess Jane will seem nice, but as the story goes on you will see that she is greedy and she blames things on other people The crown ends up not being stolen, Princess Jane has actually misplaced it. I will lead up to the climax by making the towns people get very angry at Kimberly because she has stolen the crown and Kim is in a lot of trouble. Then to have one of the familys maids finds the crown under Kim's bed. || My ending is very different than what the readers were expecting.
 * Describe the start of your story. || * Introduce your characters:
 * What do they want?
 * Where are they going?
 * What happens in the middle of your story? || * How will all your story and characters develop?
 * Plot Twists and Turns?
 * How will you lead up to the climax?
 * Outline the climax...How does the story end? || * Is your ending what your readers are expecting?
 * Have you used foreshadowing throughout your story ||