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The ant had just picked up the last piece of corn when a giant chipmunk attacked him and stole the food,which he needed because his mother was dying of Antiprosius,an incurable disease developed from the expose to red ants, that eat their brains and the victim slowly dies from it. Clover made a sort of wall round them with her great foreleg, and the ducklings nestled down inside it and promptly fell asleep. At the last moment Mollie, the foolish, pretty white mare who drew Mr. Jones's trap, came mincing daintily in, chewing at a lump of sugar.



STORY IN A WEEK Tales of Utopia My Mini Saga- The leopard seal had just devoured the baby penguin when a giant turtle charged it and knocked it on the head. Then the seal fell back into the water...it was dead. They penguins cheered overfilled with joy. They held a huge feast for the turtles for their great victory. MIDDLE _ BEGINNING _ END Work Sheet

Chuck is the leader of Woodland Country,and Anabelle is his chipmunk wife.Fluffy is the evil one of the group, and Chuck's brother. Alice is the mother of Chuck and Fluffy. Fluffy wants to take control over Woodland Country, and all of the chestnuts and berries. Anabelle is secretly in love with Fluffy. Fluffy eventually falls in love with Anabelle. Alice gets really old and dies. After Alice's death Chuck reveals his "Dark Side" Anabelle leaves Chuck for Fluffy. Chuck is in rage with Anabelle, and he declares a dictatorship over Woodland Country. Fluffy comes to the "Good Side" No. At least I don't think so.
 * Describe the start of your story. || * Introduce your characters:
 * What do they want?
 * Where are they going?
 * The story takes place in Woodland Country ||
 * What happens in the middle of your story? || * How will all your story and characters develop?
 * Plot Twists and Turns?
 * How will you lead up to the climax? ||
 * Outline the climax...How does the story end? || * Is your ending what your readers are expecting?
 * Have you used foreshadowing throughout your story ||

My Rough Draft of =__ Chestnut __ by Marissa Meyer =

There once was a faraway land called Woodland Country. The land was ruled by Chuck the Chipmunk, and at his side was his chipmunk wife, Anabelle. Chuck had a brother named Fluffy, who had a touch of evil in him. By the way Anabelle was secretly in love with Fluffy, and she wanted to leave Chuck and be with him. Chuck and Fluffy's mother, Alice, was an old and sick Chipmunk, and she was close to her end. Even though she would never admit it she had always cared for Chuck more than she had for Fluffy, and because of this Fluffy became jealous of Chuck and he despised him greatly. Fluffy had always wanted to overthrow his brother, and become leader, but he wasn’t prepared for it…not yet anyway. It's pretty good but I would get rid of the comma after old. otherwise it's fine. …

After some time Alice had passed. The cause was of chestnut poisoning. Rumors were going around that Fluffy had done it because he had always hated that his mother liked Chuck better than him, but Fluffy swore that he hadn’t done it. Chuck ordered that Fluffy should be sent to court, and put in front of the Chipmunk Jury. The Jury found Fluffy guilty for the murder of Alice Hassenhorf, and Chuck decided that he should be sent into exile. Anabelle pleaded with him not to do this, but all Chuck said was, “If you love him more than me, your husband, then go with him, but remember if you go there is no coming back”. To Chuck’s surprise Anabelle said, “Fine, maybe I will”, and stormed out. Fluffy was to be sent into exile on June 24, and the whole village had gathered to watch. During Chuck’s farewell speech Anabelle announced that she would be leaving Woodland with Fluffy because she couldn’t hide her true feelings anymore.Chuck, astonished by this, staggered back, and fell off of the tree stump he was standing on, and then there was a large gasp from the other animals. After this Fluffy and Anabelle headed into the forest, and they were never seen again, maybe. The first sentence doesn't really make sense. Otherwise it's a really good paragraph.

Since Anabelle had left Chuck revealed his “Dark Side”. Something had changed in him, and it wasn’t a good thing. Woodland had always been a type of democracy where the animals chose their leader, and voted on certain laws, but not anymore. Chuck had enforced new laws such as, The only food to be consumed by village animals are chestnuts and berries, and All goods that are produced will be collected by officers every Monday. If animals didn’t follow these rules they were sent into exile, just like Fluffy. The only animals that didn’t have to follow these laws were Chuck, and the Chipmunk Jury. You were either in or not. The other animals thought this was unfair, but Chuck kept saying it was for their own good, so they didn’t question him. Every day was the same wake up, do the morning chores, eat breakfast, listen to Chuck’s speech about how everything they were doing was for their own good, eat lunch, have relaxing time, do evening chores, eat dinner, and then retire for the night as to rest up for the next day. The only day that was different was Monday because that was the day products were to be collected.The products that were collected were food that was harvested by the animals (this was only for the Chipmunk Jury and Chuck), cotton and wool to make clothes even though those of the animals were rags, and thread, which was used for many different purposes such as, binding documents, sewing clothes, and making baskets to store food and material items. I would put a comma in the first sentence between left and Chuck. One day the Head Council of the Committee of All Animal Creatures paid an unexpected visit to Woodland. The Council was know for their perfection, they didn’t miss one detail. When they entered Woodland they instantly could tell that something was very wrong. They noticed the tiny shacks that were the animals’ houses, and the animals themselves dressed in rags. Up ahead on the path they reached a clearing where a grandly dressed group of chipmunks were giving orders to a group of squirrels. As the carriage approached, Chuck suddenly realized who was coming, and started off at a sprint, dodging gopher holes, and tree stumps as he went. The other chipmunks were about to follow him when a group of badgers from the Council grabbed them right before they could get away. As for Chuck he was pursued by a pack of porcupines that were shooting quills every which way, but the efforts of the porcupines were not enough and Chuck got away. Rumor has it that Chuck ran into Anabelle and Fluffy, and he had joined them in the wild. The rest of the animals in Woodland voted on a new leader, Sammy, a squirrel, and the council had thoroughly done a full background check, just to be safe. After Chuck had disappeared life in Woodland was better than ever, even though Chuck was a respected chipmunk, the animals liked Sammy better. This paragraph is really good I liked the ending especially.