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Do you love crazy adventures in the form of short stories with some crazy characters as well? Then buy __Who Just Took a Giant Bite of Spaghetti__ by Mr. Agamenoni’s 5th period ECS class! There is one story in particular that you will love called __A Veggie Tale of Utopia.__ It is about how vegetables decide to live their own life without having to be eaten by humans. They have had enough of watching their friends go too. Will they be able to live in a utopia with Jeffery the Celery in charge? Or will he get hungry for power fast? See what happens at the end of __A Veggie Tale of Utopia__ by Renee Wanke. This amazing story is part of __Who Just Took a Giant Bite of Spaghetti.__ Buy your copy on iTunes today!

=__Mini-Saga__=

The vegetables hoped this day would come. They were free at last, in the fridge, that is. What else could a vegetable ask for but to be allowed to live a long ,full life without being eaten by humans. No more suffering or pain. That was the world they shared.

=**__A Veggie Tale of Utopia__** =

By Renee Wanke


It all started out as a warm day in Great Falls, and a vegetarian named Natalie didn’t expect anything. She was getting ready for lunch when she opened up the refrigerator. A scream escaped her mouth when she heard a voice coming from the vegetable crisper. It was the celery stalk that she was planning to eat that meal…

Let’s back track. That morning, the celery named Jeffery was talking to his friend, Allan the cucumber, about how he didn’t want to be eaten and he didn’t want to lose any more of his friends. Jeffery was the last stalk; the rest of his family was gone. Jeffery and Allan were brainstorming ways to solve this problem, and fast, because they knew that they would soon be gone too. Jeffery realized that the only quick and easy option was to make a peace treaty with the human outside the fridge. They just weren’t sure if she would agree. They decided to make a utopia if she did, but when would that happen?

Once Natalie agreed to not put any more food in the fridge and to no longer eat from the fridge, Jeffery didn’t know where to start and what rules to make. He knew that everyone would be equal, no one would get more privileges than the other, and no one would leave the fridge or be in contact with anyone outside, not even other vegetables. His first act in charge was to find out how many vegetables would be part of this utopia in the refrigerator. All of the veggies in the fridge agreed and liked the idea. There were two peppers, two tomatoes, two big carrots, ten baby carrots, a head of lettuce that didn’t talk much, and his friend Allan. All of them were grateful that they could finally live with no pain of losing anybody and not being eaten. Jeffery rounded up all the veggies into the vegetable crisper to have a meeting. He told them the rules that he decided to live by, including never opening the fridge and never being selfish. Allan also added, “We must not be in contact with Natalie or the outside world. That would be too risky and we could get hurt or eaten.” Everyone swore to do these things, and they all voted that Jeffery would always be in charge to make the decisions, with Allan of course.

They began to create a town out of stale bread. All of the vegetables pitched in, even the baby carrots. They each got their own home if they wanted, but Jeffery said he should get a mansion because he was in charge. Allan’s first thought of Jeffery having a mansion instead of a house made him wonder if it was fair or not. The other vegetables didn’t care, they all said, “Jeffery is always right!" Each home used five slices of bread, while Jeffery’s mansion used a total of twenty slices! The town was finished in a week and had thirteen houses, one mansion, and a town hall.

While the town was being built, Jeffery was getting old. He began to get wimpy and limp. By the time everything was built, he got the mold. The mold is the worst kind of illness, and can only be cured if the vegetable that has it is amputated. Jeffery knew of this and didn’t’ want his lower half to be cut off. He hid it, but he didn’t know what the mold would do to him.

The finishing of the town was a great achievement for the veggies. In fact, they wanted to throw a party with the fruit that lived nearby. Allan liked the idea also, and was certain that Jeffery would approve. But to his surprise, Jeffery was furious, and said that they didn’t have time for a party. They had more work to be done. To this, the vegetables (except for Allan) said, "Jeffery is always right!" Jeffery also convinced them that they were exhausted, and they needed their sleep. Some did, indeed, realize that they were tired, and the others said, “Jeffery is always right!" They immediately went to bed. Allan the cucumber wasn’t quite sure what has come over Jeffery.

While the others slept, Jeffery had the sudden urge to go outside of the fridge. He barely had the strength to push open the door, but he got it open and fell to the floor. He was OK, but when he got up and looked around, he was overcome by the idea to take over the entire house. A plan began to grow in his mind.

The next morning, 3 baby carrots were missing and everyone was in shock. How could Natalie betray them like this? The two big carrots went to Jeffery because "Jeffery is always right!”. He told them that he saw them sneak out of the fridge last night. Everyone believed him, except Allan. He could tell when Jeffery was up to something, even when it was carefully planned.

The baby carrots reappeared that night, but went straight to Jeffery. Allan overheard them saying, “The mission is complete. We should be able to take over the house in a few weeks.” Allan didn’t think it was right to take over the house; they had plenty of room in the fridge. He told the others what he heard and most of them were upset too. The others that didn’t agree kept saying “Jeffery is always right!” Allan created a plan of his own, to make things right.

Natalie woke up one morning and went to her refrigerator. While she opened her brand new fridge, she stepped on something. She looked down and saw a nasty, moldy, celery stalk. She picked it up, and put it down the garbage disposal. That was the last of Jeffery, and the last of his tyranny.

** The End **

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The celery knew this day would come. It was theirs, all theirs. The fridge, that is. What else could any vegetable ask for but to be allowed to live a long and full life without being eaten by humans. No more suffering or pain. That was the world they shared.

The day came fast. I woke up at 8… I’m late for school again! It was all my parents’ fault. It always was, and for everything! I got bad grades at school, got sick all the time, and now I was waking up late. My teachers never believed me though.

The celery stalks decided to rebel from the humans. They didn’t want to be eaten, so they would make a utopia with the other fruits and vegetables in the Wanke’s fridge. There were five celery stalks instantly decided that they would be the leaders. All hoped that it would work.

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A herd of sheep had just eaten breakfast when a flock of seagulls, which had lost their bagels, flew into the barn, calling angrily at the sheep to get revenge on whoever had eaten their breakfast. One sheep named Bobby made a sort of wall round them with logs, and the seagulls started flying inside angrily. At the last moment Jeff, the nutty, ugly squirrel who delivered the sheep's food, came waltzing in, chewing on a mouthful of acorns.



<span style="display: block; font-family: 'comic sans ms',cursive; font-size: 22px; text-align: center;">STORY IN A WEEK Tales of Utopia

<span style="font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive;">MIDDLE _ BEGINNING _ END Work Sheet

One celery stalk- the ones who are born leaders tomatoe-the hardest workers carrots- does what ever he is told One cucumber- very smart and obiedent The vegetarian- the human girl who live inside the house where the fridge is located They want freedom from the humans and want to live longer, and live in a utopia the wankes will get a new fridge, but soon discover that they are rebelling too. there will be no rules they will be able to make an agreement with the humans. but the humans are confused that the vegetables can talk and think for themselves || One celery stalk will rise above them all once he gets moldy. The baby carrots will be spies and messengers with the other fridge. everyone is happy otherwise The celery will get moldy, making him evil. a baby carrot falls out of the fridge, who is actually a spy and a messenger for the head stalk. someone is thrown out to be eaten. <span style="background-color: #ffffff; color: #000000; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive;">The celery gets the mold. || no it is not happy, everyone dies because the humans can't restock the fridge <span style="background-color: #ffffff; color: #000000; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive;">many veggies wonder why the fridge won't be restocked, they know that is the only way they will thrive. ||
 * <span style="background-color: #ffffff; color: #000000; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive;">Describe the start of your story. || * <span style="background-color: #ffffff; color: #000000; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive;">Introduce your characters:
 * <span style="background-color: #ffffff; color: #000000; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive;">What do they want?
 * <span style="background-color: #ffffff; color: #000000; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive;">Where are they going?
 * <span style="background-color: #ffffff; color: #000000; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive;">What happens in the middle of your story? || * <span style="background-color: #ffffff; color: #000000; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive;">How will all your story and characters develop?
 * <span style="background-color: #ffffff; color: #000000; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive;">Plot Twists and Turns?
 * <span style="background-color: #ffffff; color: #000000; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive;">How will you lead up to the climax?
 * <span style="background-color: #ffffff; color: #000000; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive;">Outline the climax...How does the story end? || * <span style="background-color: #ffffff; color: #000000; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive;">Is your ending what your readers are expecting?
 * <span style="background-color: #ffffff; color: #000000; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive;">Have you used foreshadowing throughout your story

<span style="background-color: #ffffff; color: #000000; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive;">Roger: a 14 year old 8th grader who is using his parents as a scapegoat Roger's paretents: They want they best for Roger, like any parents, but are controling <span style="background-color: #ffffff; color: #000000; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive;">Roger wants his parents to be gone, because he thinks they are the ones making him fail at everything. His parents want to be there for rodger, but they want to control him <span style="background-color: #ffffff; color: #000000; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive;">Roger is going to run away from home, but stay in the same town. His parents are upset with him, and try to find him. || Roger will still have problems, thinking his parents found him, or they put a curse on him. He will eventually realize that he needs his parents.
 * <span style="background-color: #ffffff; color: #000000; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive;">Describe the start of your story. || * <span style="background-color: #ffffff; color: #000000; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive;">Introduce your characters:
 * <span style="background-color: #ffffff; color: #000000; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive;">What do they want?
 * <span style="background-color: #ffffff; color: #000000; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive;">Where are they going?
 * <span style="background-color: #ffffff; color: #000000; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive;">What happens in the middle of your story? || * <span style="background-color: #ffffff; color: #000000; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive;">How will all your story and characters develop?
 * <span style="background-color: #ffffff; color: #000000; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive;">Plot Twists and Turns?
 * <span style="background-color: #ffffff; color: #000000; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive;">How will you lead up to the climax? ||
 * <span style="background-color: #ffffff; color: #000000; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive;">Outline the climax...How does the story end? || * <span style="background-color: #ffffff; color: #000000; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive;">Is your ending what your readers are expecting?
 * <span style="background-color: #ffffff; color: #000000; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive;">Have you used foreshadowing throughout your story ||

=Need Group leaders, Promoters, Illustrators, Editors=

<span style="font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive;">A set of short stories/fables (each student contributes one story to a final compilation) Your story must include a quote you select...from Animal Farm. Write a short story of 700-1000 words.


 * <span style="font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive;">**Day 1 - Understanding your themes and prewriting**
 * <span style="font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive;">**Vocab Test**
 * <span style="font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive;">**[[image:http://www.wikispaces.com/i/mime/32/application/pdf.png caption="external image pdf.png" link="http://nmsutopia.wikispaces.com/file/view/themes.pdf"]][|themes.pdf] contains themes from animal farm or..Choose one below**
 * <span style="font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive;">**THEME 1** **- Class Stratification**
 * <span style="font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive;">**THEME 2** **-Propaganda and scapegoats**
 * [|MORE THEMES]
 * <span style="font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive;">**[|More on Propaganda]** **- Utopia and what happens when you try to develop the ideal**
 * **[|THEME 3] - UTOPIA**
 * <span style="font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive;">**Homework - Beginning, Middle, and End**
 * <span style="font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive;">**Plan your story - Beginning, Middle, and End**
 * <span style="font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive;">**Write your stories - <span style="font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive;">[|use this website] **
 * <span style="font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive;">**Things to remember**
 * <span style="font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive;">**show don't tell**
 * <span style="font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive;">**You may write beautifully, but without a plot your readers will quickly get bored!**
 * <span style="font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive;">**include images if you can...royalty free ones -** **royalty free images**
 * **pics 4 learning**
 * **FlickrCC**

<span style="font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive;">**Writing a Mini-Saga**
 * **<span style="font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive;">Day 2- Mini Saga - must begin NLT October 19 **
 * **<span style="font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive;">Mini Saga's - Selecting a theme for your story **
 * <span style="font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive;">**Commenting on other's Mini Sagas**

A mini saga is a <span class="IL_AD">story that is told in exactly 50 words - not 49 or 51 but exactly 50 words. 50 <span class="IL_AD">words is not a lot. With some discipline and creativity, you can say a lot in 50 words. Many writers start their books using mini-sagas. They are great way to kick ideas around without too much fuss

I hope this lens inspires you to write your own mini saga. Here are a few benefits of writing a mini saga:


 * Benefit #1**: Writing a mini saga expands your creativity. When you have too many rules, most people give up!. When you have to put everything in 50words, you have to 'leave behind' a lot. That's where the creative juices start flowing.


 * Benefit #2**: Writing a mini saga stretches your thinking. What will you write about? You have to think about topics that will fit in 50 words or squeeze them to fit in 50 words. That puts thinking on overdrive mode.


 * Benefit #3**: Writing a mini saga enhances your discipline. Deciding what to write about, deciding what to leave behind and putting it in 50words requires discipline throughout."


 * Here are some samples.**

//He dialed the number again. It was wrong number. That’s three times in a row! Something was wrong. The number seemed OK. Just when he was about to give up, he figured out, he found that the last two digits were interchanged in his phone book. That explained it all!//

//John was a regular in that train. Today seemed different, probably because of Sally who was in New York for work. They started the conversation casually but both became very close in less than thirty minutes. They exchanged phone numbers, of course. John promptly called a day later – “Wrong number!”//


 * <span style="font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive;">**Day 3 - Writing, sharing and editing your story**
 * * Rough Drafts are due** you must bring a hard copy...
 * <span style="font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive;">**Editors will revise and edit**
 * <span style="font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive;">**Adobe Dry Run?**
 * <span style="font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive;">**Write Final Drafts**
 * <span style="font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive;">**Edit and share with partner - Continue to revise - Final Drafts due Day 4**
 * <span style="font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive;">**Prepare slide and presentation for Friday activity with Dean Groom**
 * **Day 4 - Share final drafts with editors...editors make final cuts**
 * <span style="font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive;">**Day 5**
 * <span style="font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive;">**Editors prepare book for final publishing**
 * Promoters prepare promotional commercial/skit/presentation to sell your book

<span style="display: block; font-family: 'comic sans ms',cursive; font-size: 20px; text-align: center;">**Utopian Story Rubric**


 * Category || 0-2 || 3-5 || 6-8 || 9-10 ||
 * Introduction || The reader’s attention was not caught in the first paragraph. || A catchy beginning was attempted but was confusing rather than catchy. || First paragraph has a weak “grabber”. || First paragraph has a “grabber” or catchy beginning. ||
 * Organization || Ideas and scenes seem to be randomly arranged. || This story is a little hard to follow. The transitions are sometimes not clear. || The story is pretty well organized. One idea or scene may seem out of place. Clear transitions are used. || The story is very well organized. One idea or scene follows another in a logical sequence with clear, interesting transitions. ||
 * Closure || The story trails off with no resolution or sense of what will happen. || The story has a common or forced ending which the reader accepts. || The story comes to a clear resolution or deliberately leaves us wondering. || The story comes to an intriguing or satisfying conclusion and we can predict what sorts of things could happen next. ||
 * Conventions || The final draft has 5 or more spelling, usage and/or punctuation errors, even in common aspects. || There are 4 spelling, usage and punctuation errors in the final draft, some in common aspects. || There are 3 spelling, usage or punctuation errors in the final draft, in more complex aspects. || There are only 1 or 2 spelling, usage or punctuation errors in the final draft,perhaps resulting from risk-taking. Character and place names that the author invented are spelled consistently throughout. ||
 * Neatness**/images** || The final draft is not neat or attractive. It looks like the student wanted to get it done quickly and didn’t care what it looked like. || The final draft of the story is readable and the wiki page is attractive. It looks like parts of it might have been done in a hurry. At least one image has been incorporated. || The final draft of the story is readable and the wiki page is neat and attractive. It may have one or two errors, but they are not distracting. It looks like the author took some pride in creating their story and wikipage. At least one image was incorporated. || The final draft of the story is readable and the wikipage is clean, neat, and attractive. It is free of errors and misspelled words. It looks like the author took great pride in it. At least one images were incorporated on the page. ||
 * Requirements** || Many requirements were not met. || Most (about 75%) of the written requirements met, but several were not. || Almost all (about 90%) of the written requirements were met. || All of the written requirements were met. (deadlines met, length of story, and see above) ||