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My Mini Saga It was dark and hot, they had no idea as to where they were. Peyton and Derek were confused as to why this evil man was making two groups of people. One group of people looked rich and snotty. The other group looked like they didn’t have a lot of money.


 * Why? **
 * By: McKenzie Staats **
 * It was a beautiful summer day in New Orleans when four 6th grade friends, Peyton, Britny, Derek, and Tanner, decided to go on an adventure. They went on adventures all the time, they fought off bad guys and saved the princess and all. I mean they went on A LOT of pretend adventures together. When I say pretend I mean they say they found a world where it was all rainbows, butterflies, and unicorns all the time. **
 * But today’s adventure was different. They started off just trotting down to the pond and woods when Tanner suddenly tripped on a tree root and fell into a big hole in the ground. Everyone was looking around and couldn’t find him until they heard him call for help. When they found Tanner sitting in a hole next to a big oak tree they saw something sparkling under a big pile of leaves. Tanner went over to look at it he found as piece of silver paper. When Tanner picked it up it was a map and a necklace with a crystal on it. **
 * When they pulled Tanner out of the hole, they gathered around and looked closely at the map and necklace. They couldn’t figure out what the necklace and crystal were for. The wind started blowing really hard and blew the map right out of Tanner’s hands. The four friends started running after it. The weird thing was that the “storm” was only five minutes long. When it was finally over, they found the map lying on the ground by a big evergreen tree; the map was on the side that didn’t have the map on it. When Tanner picked it up he saw that there was writing on the back. He started reading it; he realized it was directions to what the crystal on the necklace did. Whenever you rubbed the crystal it would show you what you were thinking of. So he tried it while he was thinking of the day he fell off of his bike. He looked into the crystal and it showed him falling off of his bike earlier that summer. Creepy! **
 * They looked at the map, then at eachother. They were all thinking the same thing and then Peyton said, “Let’s take this adventure.” Then Derek said, “We can’t, our parents will find out and wonder where we went. Plus, we don’t even have enough supplies to survive for however long this will take us.” “So we’ll go back to our house, tell our parents and grab some supplies.” Peyton said. Then Britny said, “How will we know where we are going? I mean we don’t know how to read a map or use a compass.” “Yes we do remember in Mrs. Harrington’s social studies class she taught everyone how to use a compass and how to read a map,” Peyton replied. “Oh yeah!” Britny said. **
 * They just stood there for a minute then Tanner said, “I have nothing else to do for the rest of the summer so I say why not.” Now Tanner and Peyton were going to go on the adventure whether Britny and Derek were or not. After a moment of awkward silence Britny finally said, “I’m in. I mean this might be the only chance we get to go on a great adventure together.” So now three people were in and they were only waiting for one answer…Derek’s. After a while Derek said, “OK fine I’m in.” Now that everyone was going to go on the adventure, they ran to their houses, told their parents, and grabbed the supplies they needed. **
 * They all met up at the big oak tree and Tanner held up the map as Peyton put the necklace around her neck. They planned out the easiest route and left. They each jumped into the tunnel that Tanner fell in and went through a tunnel hidden underneath the pile of leaves. Carrying their heavy backpacks, they walked for approximately 20 minutes when they came to trail off. Tanner looks at the map and said they needed to go straight. Then Peyton got really curious and started wandering into the trail off going deeper and deeper into the tunnel. When Britny turned around she realized that Peyton was gone. She turned around and looked. Tanner turned around and said, “What’s wrong.” “Where did Peyton go?” They all looked around and then looked at the trail off tunnel. They looked at each other and started running toward the tunnel; they looked and saw Peyton walking about 50 yards away. They started running after her. When they finally got to her she was standing staring at something. They all looked at whatever Peyton was staring at, and then they realized she was staring at a big hole at the end of the tunnel. They could see a guy standing on a podium. It looked like he was splitting people into two groups. **
 * It was dark and hot, they had no idea as to where they were. Peyton and Derek were confused as to why this evil man was making two groups of people. One group of people looked rich and snotty. The other group looked like they didn’t have a lot of money. Everyone kept saying "We will work harder," and "Mr. Computer is always right." All of a sudden Derek’s foot started slipping, then Derek fell. He kept falling until he hit the ground but nobody else moved. Then the guy on the podium started running toward Derek. Then the others fell one by one and by the time the guy got there they were all sitting there. He grabbed all four of them by the arm. He took them all to the podium then put all four of them in the group that had the people who looked like they didn’t have much money. They then forgot everything that had happened the past 12 twelve years of their lives. **
 * They realized that they had been brainwashed and couldn’t do anything. They tried to escape the group but couldn’t figure out how to get back up to the tunnel then they saw a trampoline and jumped up and left the woods to go back to their homes. While they were in that place they figured out that the evil guy’s name was Mr. Computer and he was separating the people into two groups, one group of people with a lot of money and a group of people who didn’t have as much money. They later found out that Mr. Computer had known the four kids would come and had planned a trap so he could split the kids into one of the groups. His big plan was to turn the world into two classes. One class with lots of money, and one with not as much money. The only thing they couldn’t figure out was…why? **
 * THE END! **

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Dean Groom Activity 2 The wolf had just bitten in = = to a big steak down when a big group of turkeys, who had just seen a mouse, ran screaming into the den, screaming loudly and pacing from side to side to find some place where they would not see a mouse. Snowy, the wolf, rolled his eyes at them and made a sort of pillow round them with his friend the weasel and the turkeys nestled down inside it and promptly fell asleep. At the last moment Weasey, the foolish, pretty white weasel who drew Mr. Bear's trap, came mincing daintily in, chewing at a lump of tree. = =

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My Mini Saga

It was dark in the den as Mr. Bear started to walk in. The other animals were hiding in their closets as Weasey was standing in the dark right behind the trap with Snowy by his side. Mr. Bear heard a crack as he froze in his tracks. It was the floor creaking.

Characters: Peyton, Britny, Derek, and Tanner. Four best friends who go on the adventure of a lifetime and discover something they never expected > What do they want? They want to make the world a better place and learn more about how and why people want to take over and make people feel bad and good about themselves. They are going to a world where half of the world looks like a lot of rich and snotty people live and the other half looks like a lot of people who don't have a lot of money live. ||
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The plot is when Mr. Computer, the evil guy, is making up secret plans to try to get the four kids into one of the groups so he can brain-wash them. The four friends find out that someone has been trying to split the world into two groups and is trying to get Peyton, Britny, Derek, and Tanner split up also. One group is made up of people who are rich and have lots of money. The other group is made up of people who don't really have a lot of money and don't have nice homes. || = = || * Is your ending what your readers are expecting? No it is way different than what th = = e readers will expect. Yes I have. = = || = =
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