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As the two magical fairies had just finished flying around as a group of jumping jellyfish, who had jumped the jellied out of one jellyfish, flopped into the magical fairies cave and wiggled all around the room to find a place where they would not be sat on. Terry, one of the magical fairies, made a barrier of candy around the jellyfish with her magical candy dust, and the jumping jellyfish stopped jumping and feel asleep. At the last millisecond Junie, the other magical fairy, the pretty, and green fairy who drew the fairy catchers', Mr. Blops', trap, came randomly dancing in, choping at a sugar cube.

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As the eagles came flying around circling the Ravens they came bursting down with pine cones in there mouths and hidden in there wings as they dropped them down onto the Ravens. The Ravens made the signal for attack as everyone flustered into air going into battle with the Eagles.

The Happening Of England -Jori N Foss The Queen of England has been ruler for five years, since King John had passed away. Ever since she became head ruler, the people of England have been working twenty hours a day, children and adults. The adults always have to give a quarter of their salary to the Queen and the secondary rulers. They are named "The Queens Pack" because they do everything for her and with her. But though, they do everything for her, they also get paid a quarter of the children’s salary a week. If you don't do as the Queen says you will be executed. On January 1st, 1987, the people of England made a plan to try and change that. Only about half of England wanted to be part of this, so they all met up in one little city as the Queen and her pack had dinner. Tons of people came as a man rose to the top of a building and made an announcement they were going to attack everyone at the Queens headquarters. Though, a young lady, about 23, ran inside and to the top of the building. She stood thinking for a few moments as it got silent. Finally she spoke. As soon as she said she is the Queens Maid, everyone started randomly throwing everything at her. Though, the man at the top of the building got the people to calm down as the man started telling them to let her speak. She said, "I came out here because i am going help you all attack, and I have a plan to be ruler and we will all be free of working all the time, and getting our money taken, and worrying about our children. Yes, I have been living in the Queens headquarters as her maid. But now this is a way for you to attack. I know everything that goes on in that building." Everyone started to cheer wildly and clap in worship of the maid, who was going to change their lives. Her name is Mary Aswell, who has mistreated by the Queen all these years. They made a plan to have Mary try to give the Queen suggestions on everything. The Queen still did not yet know about the plan the people of England had to attack and make Mary the Queen of England. Though, the Queen believed that only what she thinks is right. Then, only a few short days later, when she got the notification that Mary was going to try to overthrow her position as Queen. She started sending out letters to everyone in England saying lies about Mary. And at the bottom of every latter she would sign, "Anonymous". Though, the Queen acted to Mary as if she didn’t know a thing. Mary did not know of anything the Queen knew. Until, suddenly everyone was sending Mary letters, bad letters. Speaking of the lies the Queen had put in her letters. They decided to have another gathering while they Queen and her pack went to another city for two days. Mary was not invited but she had heard about it and decided she will have to go and explain. As even more people in England arrived, Mary quietly went inside the building, and to the top. When the man who had been speaking before had seen her, he suddenly pushed her as if to throw her off the building. She started screaming and pushed the man off of her and started to explain. Those lies were not true and she still has the plan to overthrow the Queens thrown. As a little group of seven people, five men, two women, gathered to the top of the building to talk in a small group. The plan had been made. They had two days to take down the Queen and her headquarters. First they needed a key to get in. Four guards stand at the front door. Though, Mary had a key. That evening, around 10 pm, the seven people stood in the woods behind the palace, as the guards let Mary use the key, and enter. She went straight to a secret escape door the Queen had shown her in case of an attack or fire. She opened the door as the seven ran silently inside. They hid in Mary’s small room. The next morning the “Queens Pack” had arrived. The Queen was to be gone for one more day to have a meeting with her sister. Mary had grabbed the extra guard suits from the laundry. There were only enough for the five men. So Mary told let the cooks off work, as the women were to dress as newly hired cooks. They introduced themselves to the Queens Pack and went back to work. Lunch was to be served. They had gone out the secret door and grabbed some poison from one of the leaves. They put the poison into the bread dough and soup, and set it on the table as the Queens Pack started to eat. They watched through the crack of a door what happened. All of them started coughing and taking huge gulps in the water. Though, they were not dying, the poison does not kill unless too much gets into your body. They fell into deep sleep and the Queens Pack was not to be awake until 13.5 hours later. So the women were to go home until the next day. The men told the guards they would take their shift for the day and night. So now the only people in the palace left were Mary, the five men, and the garbage man. He was going to help them make Mary Queen. The next day the Queen arrived. Her and Mary had a spat and tried to turn the guards against her. But they told her there was to be a vote or die. Mary won the vote. The people of England were now free from the Queen and the Pack. :)

BEGINNING~MIDDLE~END_worksheet poorly || * Characters: The Queen of England, "The Queens Pack", Mary Aswell the Queen and her "pack" || * The people are planning on attacking the headquarters and making Mary Queen
 * The Queen of England is treating her people
 * They are living in England ||
 * <span style="background-color: #ffffff; color: #000000; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive;">The people of England want to get rid of
 * <span style="background-color: #ffffff; color: #000000; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive;">The Queen finds out abouther cleaning lady, Mary, was going to try and become Queen
 * <span style="background-color: #ffffff; color: #000000; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive;">Seven people of England were going to sneak into the Queens headquarters with the help of Mary ||
 * <span style="background-color: #ffffff; color: #000000; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive;">Outline the climax...How does the story end? || * <span style="background-color: #ffffff; color: #000000; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive;">I have a feeling the ending is probably what some readers will expect
 * <span style="background-color: #ffffff; color: #000000; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive;">Mary became Queen of England and the people were no longer mistreated ||

<span style="font-family: 'comic sans ms',cursive; font-size: 20px;">**Utopian Story Rubric**


 * Category || 0-2 || 3-5 || 6-8 || 9-10 ||
 * Introduction || The reader’s attention was not caught in the first paragraph. || A catchy beginning was attempted but was confusing rather than catchy. || First paragraph has a weak “grabber”. || First paragraph has a “grabber” or catchy beginning. ||
 * Organization || Ideas and scenes seem to be randomly arranged. || This story is a little hard to follow. The transitions are sometimes not clear. || The story is pretty well organized. One idea or scene may seem out of place. Clear transitions are used. || The story is very well organized. One idea or scene follows another in a logical sequence with clear, interesting transitions. ||
 * Closure || The story trails off with no resolution or sense of what will happen. || The story has a common or forced ending which the reader accepts. || The story comes to a clear resolution or deliberately leaves us wondering. || The story comes to an intriguing or satisfying conclusion and we can predict what sorts of things could happen next. ||
 * Conventions || The final draft has 5 or more spelling, usage and/or punctuation errors, even in common aspects. || There are 4 spelling, usage and punctuation errors in the final draft, some in common aspects. || There are 3 spelling, usage or punctuation errors in the final draft, in more complex aspects. || There are only 1 or 2 spelling, usage or punctuation errors in the final draft,perhaps resulting from risk-taking. Character and place names that the author invented are spelled consistently throughout. ||
 * Neatness**/images** || The final draft is not neat or attractive. It looks like the student wanted to get it done quickly and didn’t care what it looked like. || The final draft of the story is readable and the wiki page is attractive. It looks like parts of it might have been done in a hurry. At least one image has been incorporated. || The final draft of the story is readable and the wiki page is neat and attractive. It may have one or two errors, but they are not distracting. It looks like the author took some pride in creating their story and wikipage. At least one image was incorporated. || The final draft of the story is readable and the wikipage is clean, neat, and attractive. It is free of errors and misspelled words. It looks like the author took great pride in it. At least one images were incorporated on the page. ||
 * Requirements** || Many requirements were not met. || Most (about 75%) of the written requirements met, but several were not. || Almost all (about 90%) of the written requirements were met. || All of the written requirements were met. (deadlines met, length of story, and see above) ||